Honestly it was a little too short if it was at least 2 pages you probably would get more readers.
I have questions
Does going to America having to do with main plot? Also why didn't you make this chapter a start of a sequel to the previous storyline? Are they interconnected? If so how will you connect the storylines to each other?
Anyway you seem to having trouble ending you chapters you could use a improvement on that.
Still you have potential to be a very great writer so keep trying Love
One more thing to say you Ichihime rules!
I know it was short, but at the moment I felt as if the plane ride & the classroom one shouldn't really be all in page, I don't know why but it did kinda help me not hold back as much with the detail :3
1. Does going to America having to do with main plot?
-Yes it is, I thought the scenery would be much better, it'd have a interesting environment and there will much importance on the trip.
2. Also why didn't you make this chapter a start of a sequel to the previous storyline?
-This is the sequel, in the first couple chapters, there was a couple scenes where she was recovering from the incident from the first Storyline, now all they're trying to do is get past that. Don't worry, it will be referenced somewhere in the Storyline.
On the note that I need to improve my endings,
Yea, I do :/ I'm a beginner writer so for me this is like a start up xP
And thanks for the compliment :3 And yes, Ichihime does rule<3
Thank you for your critique and I hope you enjoy my further storylines. :3