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Orihime was a broken girl who despite her harsh life always smiled and hoped for the

better. Her whole family was killed and was reduced to being a

plaything of man called Mara luckily she was not a sex slave but a slave nothing less.

The man Mara happened to be the Dictator of the Japanese Empire who's

had family had taken over all of East Asia from Mongolia to Thailand. Mara treated her

like a lesser being she was often humiliated for nothing other than Mara

got sick pleasure from her suffering.

"Things will get better, I just know they will" she often thought.




Ichigo was a soldier of a Japanese father and a Chinese mother. He was often picked on

for that fact that he was not purely Japanese rather than his orange

hair. His only friends were Uryu Ishida who was also born of a Japanese father and a

Chinese mother. Tatsuki Ariswia who a girl who Ichigo spared with and

"Chad" although his real name was Christian Jesus Rivera a son of a U.S. Navy Seal who

was assigned to protect the U.S. Ambassador. Fortunately for Ichigo

he was of the Kurosaki family and his father was a high ranked government official. This

enabled Ichigo to join the Japanese Army at fifteen and rise through the

ranks. Despite this Ichigo was still unhappy with his life for he felt nothing he did

would ever make him feel any worth.

If that was not enough soon his mother died after his nineteenth birthday which caused

him to be more cynical than before. Two years passed and soon Ichigo

became a cold and unfeeling robot. He no longer cared what he did anymore and just did

his duty putting down rebellions and killing without regrets. Mara

congratulated him and held party in his honor.

"So what think of the party?" Mara asked.

"I personally don't care" Ichigo replied.

Mara grinned and soon made a toast to Ichigo. He soon presented a girl dressed in rags

with beautiful gray eyes and auburn hair. She gave Ichigo a sad smile

and suddenly for the first time in two years he smiled.

"Here's a gift for your loyalty Ichigo Kurosaki my former slave and don't worry she's a

virgin because it much more fun to see her tortured than to have my way with her. However

in all the years I tortured her I not once seen her cry which is no fun for me" He said

smugly.

That night he felt also for the first time anger how could the man he gave his life for

treat a girl that way. Is this what he did his duty for to see this man torture people

for sick pleasure?

"I'm sorry I must be going for have some paper work to do."

"Then by all means Ichigo go but don't forget your gift"

Ichigo than slowly walked towards her and said "Don't worry I will not treat you the way

Mara did". With that they both left the party for he now knew what he had to do for both

her and the people Mara had sent him to kill.
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This story was inspired by Code Geass and my love for using real history as basis for AU's.

Here you meet a character that I created who also appears in my other fanfic Destiny of the Divine Kami. I love him because he's evil that even I want him to gets his comeuppance.
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:iconanimekingstephan:
I like this story so far. :) Just like my girlfriend, I am a (major *///*) Orihime fan and I like to look at and read anything with her in it.
So the idea behind this story is very interesting, I can tell you that. I think that, to improve this story, you should replace some words and use others that impact more, if you get what I mean. The website www.wordhippo.com should help a lot in that area. And you might want to have more comma usage in this story.
Other than that, I really like it. :D Keep up the good work. Practicing, reading, writing, and maybe listening to some music can help a lot.
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:iconwolvefan29:
Mood: Love ~wolvefan29 Jan 28, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This getting interesting please write more.
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:iconsonegai:
reads very nice
I love those stories
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:icon12kelly123:
Write the second one please for our sake
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:iconfeyyang:
Mood: Love ~feyyang Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist
love it :) when is the next ??
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:iconephaneychan:
OOOOOH!!!!I can't wait for the next part!!!!!

There were a couple of spelling mistakes,and then there were also some parts where you forgot to add some details,but other than that,i thought it was great!!!
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:iconusaberryhime:
Okay, first off I like the AU. I think it's so lovely that Ichi's a soldier, yet a little sad Orihime was a slave. (Maybe she can be a princess in secret that the Mara had her family killed to cover her royal bloodline! Yes! haha just kidding, forget that little tidbit, I just went on a rant :D)

The only thing I wished for this was for more detail. You have the story and plot down, I just hunger for more detail!^^ Like when Mara first presented Orihime to Ichigo, it could go something along the lines of,
"Mara unveiled the servant he called Orihime to the young soldier. She wore the rags of a servant, but she was beautiful. Her hair was long and flowing auburn brushing the small of her back and her silver eyes gazed at his brown. Her rosy cheeks blushed slightly greeting him with a sweet hello whispered from her full crimson lips. Ichigo could tell this girl has been through many trials and hardships, but he could also tell she overcame each and every one with vigor and cheer. He wanted to take her away from all that and get revenge to those who have harmed her."

Ah! Sorry, I got a little carried away there, but it's not my story! Please make more, I'm looking forward to it!
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:iconangelusamy:
Don't worry it just a prologue the other chapters will be longer
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:iconusaberryhime:
Oh good, remember detail and you'll be golden :D (Ah! I'm inspired to write a bit as well)
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